editing essay
Humanities
Words Draft – Draft # 2
1. Finish Essay
2. Completion check Draft # 1 [format correct and all27 parts of the essay are complete]
3. Words Draft-From non-formal to formal, from common to ACADEMIC
a. Circle all the words on this list regardless of where they appear
b. Count the number of circled words and put that number at the top of your page. Work against that number making a choice about each individual word circle
c. Edit- define, describe, delete, simplify with comma rules, or restructure sentence as -necessary to remove 90 % of circled words
– You, your, us, our, we [ 100 % of these words should be gone through definition , detail , description ]
– I, me, my , mine , myself [ 100 % of these words should be gone through definition , detail , description ]
– Thing , anything , something , nothing , everything [ 100 % of these words should be gone through definition, detail, description]
– Might, may , seems , maybe , if [ 100 % of these words should be gone through concrete detail , definitive verbs: IS, AM, ARE, WAS, WERE, DOES,]
Contractions (It’s, Doesn’t, can’t, won’t, I’m, isn’t, I’ve, they’re, they’ve, Couldn’t, wouldn’t, shouldn’t, haven’t, etc. ) [ 100 % of these words should be gone by splitting up the word They’ve > They have
– But, IF, SO And at the start, of a sentence [ 100 % of these words should be gone. Replace with appropriate academic transitions. But> However. And>additionally. so >Therefore] That, It, Its, [9 out of 10 should be deleted… Restructure the sentence as needed. It is important > learning is important.]
-Can, Will [9 out of 10 should be deleted. These should only to appear in a conclusion about the future. Restructure the sentence as needed. Replace with concrete detail, definitive verbs: IS, AM, ARE, WAS, DOES, WERE OR drop the verb and add an “s.” School WILL help >School helps.]
– Should, Would, Could. [9 out of 10 should be deleted… These should only to appear in a conclusion about the future. Restructure the sentence as needed. Replace with concrete detail, definitive verbs: IS, AM, ARE, WAS, WERE OR drop the verb and add an “s.” School COULD help> School helps.]
-very, many, much, angry, big, cold, hot, good, bad, tall, short, young old, long, [DEFINE WITH CONCRETE DETAIL dead adjectives: Very HOT > 104 degrees.]
Circle ANY WORD used twice in any sentence. [Drop, change, edit, and restructure the sentence so this sentence becomes: Any word used twice in a sentence.]
Circle ANY CONTENT WORD used twice in two touching sentences. These words within sentence need to also be Dropped, changed, edited, restructured, or combined.
Circle ANY CONTENT WORD used twice in two touching sentences need to also be Dropped, changed, edited, restructured, or combined.
Quotes must be introduced by a signal phrase at the start of a sentence. [WRONG: “quote.”/ Right: Somebody says, “quote.”
