The Effect of Television Viewing on Children’s Behavioral Development – Savvy Essay Writers | savvyessaywriters.net
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Walden University
MS Psychology – I/O Psychology
PSYC-6393 (Capstone)
September 29, 2019
Abstract
Table of Contents
Introduction……………………………………………………………………4
Contemporary Issues…………………………………………………………..5
Background Definitions…………………………………………………..……6
Problem Statement…………………………………………………………….7
Integrated Literature Review…………………………………………………..9
Critical Analysis……………………………………………………………….TBD
Problem Resolution……………………………………………………………TBD
Social Implications…………………………………………………………….TBD
Capstone Reflection……………………………………………………………TBD
References………………………………………………………………………TBD
Introduction
Child behavioral development is important to every parent, society and the nation at large. When children are brought up in a well-mannered way through instilling good behaviors in them, parents as well as the society finds peace and joy in the children. Nevertheless, due to the changing nature of the society, children brought up has greatly changed. [<–Sentence structure: As a reader, this sentence was hard for me to follow as not all points within the sentence were clear and or clearly connected. Example: Parents have been raising children differently in tandem with societal changes] Technology has impacted the behavior of children and continues to change their lives differently each day. [<–APA: Is this point supported by a source? Per APA, each sentence that provides information from a source, or needs to be supported by a source, should be cited. This is to ensure points are supported and accidental plagiarism is avoided] The availability and accessibility of technological gadgets such as cellphones, computers, television by children is increasing every day. This paper focuses on investigating on how television viewing has influenced behavioral development among children below 18 years of age. Research studies about child behaviors is greatly influenced by what they watch in television, online, movies and peers more than the influence and guidelines they get from their parents and close relatives. [<–Connection and flow: As a reader, the connection between this point and the previous one wasn’t quite clear to me. For instance, this point seems more general than the previous point which seems like a purpose statement for the paper]
Children hostile behaviors are increasing tremendously currently in different ways. [<–Connection and flow: As a reader, I wasn’t always following the connection and flow among points. For instance, some points from the previous paragraph seem connected to points in this paragraph, such as the focus on children’s behavior in connection to technology. For strong connection and flow, I suggest keeping like / similar topics and points together] The influences children get while watching television are both positive and negative. For instance, child bullying in schools, drug use, early introduction into sex, malnutrition and obesity, aggressive and violent behaviors and prosocial and educational benefits are some of the influence children get from watching television. [<–Sentence structure: As a reader, some sentences were hard for me to follow. For instance, not all wording within this sentence was clear and or clearly connected. For clear and complete sentences, I suggest ensuring wording within sentences are clear and clearly connected and sentences follow subjectverbobject as a structure. Example: For instance, television may influence children to become involved in drug use and early sex, develop eating disorders, or partake in bullying and other aggressive and violent behaviors. The highlighting and font correspond to the parts of the sentence: yellow highlighting in bold type=subject; green highlighting in underlined type=verb; blue highlighting in italicized type=object] However, the negative effects are of high concern since they make the child antisocial and eventually turns the child inhumane. The educative episodes in television enhances the vital educational skills for children during their preschool period hence improving the academic performance of the child. Nevertheless, “television viewing in infancy is disruptive to play; it reduces the quality and quantity of child-parent interactions and is associated with inattentive/hyperactive behaviors, lower executive functions, and language delay, at least in the short-term” (Kostyrka-Allchorne, K., Cooper, N. R., & Simpson, A., 2017). [<–Introduction and connection and flow: Since sources are used to support claims, they would usually not begin or end a paragraph. That said, as a reader, it wasn’t quite clear to me if all of these points in these introduction paragraphs were part of the introduction. More specially, the first paragraph of a paper is usually the introductory paragraph that introduces the overall topic of the paper for readers and ends with a thesis (the main claims you argue in the paper) and or a purpose statement, so readers know what will be covered in the paper regarding the topic introduced. Example purpose statement: In this paper, I will discuss xxx] Comment by Veronica Oliver: Connection and flow: You might check out our blogs on connection and flow and transitions for tips on ensuring strong organization, connection, and flow among points Comment by Veronica Oliver: Connection and flow: Here is an example of where a transitions (“For instance”) helped connect points for me as a reader as points move from a claim to an example to support the claim Comment by Veronica Oliver: Sentence structure: You might check out our page on sentence structure—on the right side you can find the tab for “knowledge check” where you can test your knowledge of sentence structure Comment by Veronica Oliver: APA: This is correct—using “&” as opposed to “and” when a source is cited parenthetically (when it is in parentheses) Comment by Veronica Oliver: APA: Author’s first name initials wouldn’t be included in a citation. As well, when a direct quote is included, the page number where the quote was found would be included (as “p. xx”). For sources with no page numbers, the paragraph number would be included (as “para. xx”) Our page on citation includes an overview of how to cite, how often, and the importance of doing so
Contemporary Issue
There are various contemporary issues that are meaningful when discussing the effects of television watching among children: (1) the increase of juvenile delinquency behaviors which is attributed to imitations from television (de Leeuw, R. N. H., Kleemans, M., Rozendaal, E., Anschütz, D. J., & Buijzen, M., 2015); (2) rise in obesity among young children due to too much time taken watching television and consumption of snack among the young children (Nikkelen, S. W. C., Vossen, H. G. M., & Valkenburg, P. M., 2015); (3) increase in drug and alcohol abuse among children as influenced by the ads children see in television among other key contemporary factors. All these factors significantly influence the behavioral development of children and thus appropriate actions should be taken to revert the trend. This paper intends to find the changing life of children dur to the introduction and continuous use of television among children. Comment by Veronica Oliver: Spelling: Do you mean “due” here as opposed to “dur”?
Background Definitions
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Problem Statement
The problem is that many children are developing extraordinary behaviors which their parents and guardians don’t even understand how they got the behaviors. Juvenile delinquency has increased more significantly due to these adopted behaviors. Children are become obese and have developed critical medical problems because of too much time children take watching television than playing and doing other physical exercises useful to their health wellbeing. A research done by the University of Michigan found that just being awake and in the room with the television for several hours a day poses risk of obesity at ages three to four-and-a-half. [<–Cohesion and flow: As a reader, it wasn’t quite clear to me what the focus of the paper was. For instance, earlier it seemed that the focus was on violent behavior as a result of children watching television, whereas here the focus seems to be obesity. As well, this section seemed like an additional introduction section, so I wasn’t quite following the cohesion and flow of the topic and sections of the paper] Children effected by this will have weight issues that continue into adulthood resulting in serious and complicated medical challenges (Michael Rich, M.D., S. Jean Emans, M.D., Elizabeth R. Woods, M.D., M.P.H., Robert H. DuRant, Ph.D., 2013)….
